Last Night Comments

wow soo lovle linee soo cute

You do write well, Shraddha...You just need to be a bit more coherent, that's all...

I understand the plight of a woman at night, its just so sad that this happens in a modern society like we now have. This is a beautiful poem, expressive and true.

Beautiful write on today's situation..Yes, girl or women should be cautious at night...Loved the you wrote.

nicely pointed out! ! .. gud one! ! ! ...

nice poem! ...and i enjoyed! :)

Beautiful Shr....So nice!

thnx bhaiya...............

BEAUTIFUL COMPOSITION....

i thank u all for giving time to my poem.............

Arti Chopra has nicely done her part.

Dear Shraddha Thank u for requesting m to critique your poems.I am not a very experienced poet but I can offer you a few suggestions, A poem doesn't always have To rhyme...it can sound beautiful by the choice of the correct words and the emotions portrayed. For eg Your first two stanzas seem to concentrate only on finding a rhyming word, so it sounds forced and not so good Try this It was a beautiful night Twinkling stars made a heavenly sight My heart was smiling Filled with light What a beautiful starry night and as I walked down the street, Stars shining, and keeping beat Twinkling in step with my dancing feet I felt they were giving me a special treat Doesn't that sound nicer? So keep practising till you achieve simplicity and beauty in your poems Hope you don't mind the criticism But this is what I feel Happy writing.... Arti Chopra

Some times life wil have a U-turn. good narration.

A good poetic reflection on the current situation.