Wednesday, August 10, 2005

Landscape 23 Come Away! Comments

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When I was young and the wind was right
I could hear the foghorns down on the Thames
The great sea-voices of the ships
Coming into the Port of London
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Stewart McKenzie
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Max Reif 10 August 2005

I enjoyed the cadence of this poem. The description is good, so is the evocation of nostalgia. I'm not sure the last line can't be improved, just a tad. (who knows?) You stirred me with the body of the poem, I wonder if the last line couldn't stir just a little more. Maybe I'm just being finicky.

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