Land Of The Free (C) 3-29-08 Comments

Horrible theme. This poem is nothing like the reality. America is much greater than this.

Great thinking. Hats off for being frank, brave and bold.

If you're going to write a repetitive poem starting every line with the word, Freedom, you keep it that way. Breaking your own writing pattern makes a bad poem. Same with rhyming patterns. The rhymes get really forced at points because of the structure you laid out for yourself, the last line doesn't rhyme, sentence structure is mangled in parts. Overall would give it a 4 out of 10. I would give it a 3 out of 10, but then again, you're at least trying to write something deep.

I agree with this poem. I think it speaks the truth of what freedoms we have in America.

i love this poem, it's beautiful, i actually first heard this poem from a friend who had gotten me to read it, and i liked it then and still do.

I actually thought that this poem was GREAT! ! ! your a really wounderful poet... and i also think that u shouldnt even worry at all about the negative responses that you've got... Because you wrote what you wrote for a reason and anyone/ everyone opinions should be heard... Keep up the GREAT work..

your poem is beautiful....i can't even describe it in words...thank you for finally putting words to this...a lot of americans feel this way but keep their mouths shut...dont get me wrong i love america but it different now...

Reminds me of young Dylan.....and I don't mean Thomas...brave write.....John

Hmm.Quite patriotic and thought provoking, this is very impressive, My young friend,