Saturday, November 16, 2019

Kissing The World Adieu Comments

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Fear trembling shaking old bones aching

Anger constant fighting rage of the unknown of no control
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Sebastian Melmoth
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Bri Edwards 01 December 2019

2 – Time for more proofreading. " Time to go on a journey to the comfort with family and friends reunited on the other side at piece seeking solace from a different view " i'd said " of family" and.." peace" ! ha ha. it is in both copies of poem, above. last line; i'd use " wave & walk" but i like it well enough to send to MyPoemList. bri :)

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Bri Edwards 01 December 2019

1 – is " tick box" a clock? ok, the answer is at end of poem favorite line so far: " When will the release come for the end starting to look like a good friend? "

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