Friday, August 2, 2013

Just Walking Comments

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You walked away.
I left you behind.

My heart, my soul in retreat and afraid
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Bri Edwards 09 August 2013

i like how you changed from You walked away to But It was only I who walked away. i believe there are times when the brain knows best! but i suppose it depends on the brain! i have been lucky (three divorces etc) that my heart and brain seem to work pretty well in unison to make the big decisions. or sometimes luck is involved. does that come from the spleen? i also like that you, apparently, were comfortable using lines of very varying lengths, AND did not feel compelled to use rhymes........though i DO love rhymes (good ones) ... thanks for sharing.

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Joshua Fegley 03 August 2013

Yes. I too have many regrets. Yet I am only left to ponder if it was for the best or was I just procrastinating and wasting my options. Such is life. Good poem David.

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David Z 02 August 2013

Thank you for your comments Dave, I am attempting to put this right.

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Dave Walker 02 August 2013

We always end up with regrets, sometimes they can be put right A great write.

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