Just A Leaf Poem by ONElia AVElar

Just A Leaf

Rating: 3.6


A dream about a kiss
of another man
fell slowly like a leaf
between two bodies,
on the bed;
a lively yellow spot
between white sheets...
She worries if it is
first autumn leaf
of her love`s tree…
If so, the unexpected season
should pass soon…
just leaves…

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
James B. Earley 15 May 2008

A muse of passionate angst! Excellent.

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Kesav Easwaran 15 May 2008

so big a poem this short one is, on expressions of finer emotions! a leaf ever green, stayed put to your lips, ever not falling...be it autumn or spring... very good one onelia!

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Dr.subhendu Kar 10 May 2008

love seems to dapple by the green still the dream when nestles between the swings.................beautiful imagery of love when luscious by the leaf, well penned,10+, thanks for sharing

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Donall Dempsey 10 May 2008

Possibly your best poem...until the next one! The imagery is beautifuly worked into the poem and is so startling and yet so simple. It haunts the imagination in its beauty and orginality. You never cease to surprise by what your mind elects to observe and how well it puts a feeling into words. love Donall Donall

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David Desantis 09 May 2008

whoa...excellent work here onelia.......you have such an original mind... i never would have thought of this....the imagery of love being a tree, and a leaf falling off of it as adultery fantasies abound is a great idea...the contrast between the sheets and the leaf were excellent....i'd give this more than a 10 if i could

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Hans Vr 03 June 2010

Very very nice Touching and moving The image of the yeallow leave, how ingenious and creative

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Rema Prasanna 05 July 2008

Just a leaf it can dry and fall but hopes there can give a spring bloomed in flowers and colors.. You write at ease in a few line-wonders I can say. 10 ++ Rema

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R H 29 May 2008

Simple words, yet complex issues in this revealing poem in which the symbolism of the leaf carries with it is weighted with a myriad of un answered questions, revelations and desires upon which the narrator ponders. Strong imagery here Onelia....finely crafted. j xx

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Alison Cassidy 16 May 2008

This poem has something of the haiku feel, without its rigid structure. Understated and uncluttered, your words tell of desire and dreams and just a little guilt. The yellow leaf is a perfect metaphor and your final lines leave the reader wondering... Whimsical penning. love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥

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Bill Thomas 16 May 2008

Stunning, Onelia, simply stunning. You say so much in so few words - thank you.

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