Friday, September 26, 2014

Just A Friend Comments

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I tell myself, 'you are stronger than this'
But I know in my heart that I miss
Everything that was, has been, and had been
Fine, you own me, you win
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Athena Hood
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Kakoli Mukherjee 26 September 2014

Hi Athena, you are right about the clues part. Life does leave clues on our way, but we ignore and end up paying for it. Nice poem, do keep writing.

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L Rao 26 September 2014

Hi... nice way to start off...pls consider it as my suggestion as I often don't.. the 11th line is too big and the 15th line is too short. if the second stanza is 6lines make the 4th stanza 6lines. But...you have the feel of dejected love or mistrust, the pain just flows poetically...keep the pain. because joy just flirts while sorrow inspires....Regards Rao

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Kumarmani Mahakul 26 September 2014

Your first poem in PH is beautifully composed that expresses your deepest feelings about to become just a friend.

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Chinedu Dike 26 September 2014

A case of tragedy in the bliss of love. A nice poem well put together. Lovely. Thanks for sharing. Please read my poem MANDELA - THE IMMORTAL ICON.

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