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Inside the skull
Tenderly kept a bud
Petals are held together tight
Containing all the beauty
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Abdul Wahab
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Bri Edwards 23 November 2013

Clinched into a fist....use clenched; clinched is something else. typo perhaps? i wish i understood this better. perhaps a lot of my trouble is that (i assume) english is not the language you are more accustomed to using. and perhaps, as marie mentions (below) . you are using similes....which i may not understand the way you and she seem to. and unlike what she implies in her comment, i see few if any alliterations. if there is ONE of your poems you are REALLY anxious for me to read (you did tell me to read some of your 'popular poems') , please send me the complete title or, better yet, copy and paste it to me in a message. thanks for sharing. :)

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