Jawa The Loved Unloved Comments
I was a vagabond until they took me in,
I was scared when my first day was to begin,
They said, "Everything's alright."
They named me Jawa, which I took cheerfully.
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3 – This is a fine story and i'm sure will make some dog-lovers (& others) cry (or close to it) . there is little for me to 'complain about' here! To MyPoemList. Bri ;)
2 - " pled" ok for " pleaded" though the latter is usually preferred it seems two favorite lines of many: " I knew no door no gate would welcome me, Even in my heyday, it was just me." [this poem sounds very familiar! ! ! ] stanza 5 'needs' work
1 - line 9: shabby and scruffy are very closely related. it's ok. probably better for clothing and people, not dogs. :) line 18: " service" i don't know such a usage. some slang or vernacular there? stanza 4: how about " flies which did hum" ? next line: " had become" keep the same verb tense here as above i say.
That's a sad story of how human affections blow hot and cold. Thanks for being awake to the pain and isolation suffered by a fellow creature.
one can stand only so much stink! ! ! then it is " out the door! ! ! " . besides, they may not have had the money to care for such a 'rotten' dog.
Wow! Great poetry, Solomon. You may like to read my poem, Love And Iust. Thank you.
this poet, Jazib, has recommended the same poem to many i believe. that's ok! !
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7/18/2025 9:27:12 PM # 1.0.0
A poignant rendition nicely put together. Very passionately and movingly penned with strong emotions.
Thank you Chinedu Dike for the kind words!