Jagged Jarid Vs Masher Matty Comments

Very interesting poem, more of a tongue twister but really good.5****

I'm sure your ending was an unforeseen spectacle for all involved, including me. YIKES! ! With reservations, I give 5 stars. bri : )

BIG LAUGH here: 'but then a , rubbed his teeth' That is one of many moves I didn't learn on the mat in HIGH SCHOOL. ;)

'Three arms wrapped Matty's legs, ' Maybe you mean/meant 'Tree-arms' aka 'arms as big around as large tree limbs'. Well, 'arms' ARE sometimes called 'limbs'.

(cont.) then 'He pulled it right' make it 'he pulled', and I think you left out some punctuation marks (I think) .

middle of stanza 2: 'a single leg and too Matty's dread'....'to'...of course. Ya lunkhead. bri : ))))

I got a laugh from: 'His head squeezed his shoulders, as if screwed tight by the Green Giant' I'll assume 'Green Giant' refers to the fellow who graced the labels of Green Giant cans of cooked peas etc.

(cont.) Could you have meant 'slammer', 'One who, or that which, slams.'? ?

'a slinging, slapping body slabber' So far, I only find a noun 'slabber' listed as drool/spit or a type of machine.

SWANK (as a noun) : I find: 'behaviour that is too confident' Swank can also be an adjective. I'll assume you are using poetic license to use 'swank' as one who demonstrates swank.

This just made me laugh so much. And a poetic tongue twister on top of that. Loved it.