J.A.R. Of Maggots Comments

Brilliant write, keep it up!

''Life is just, but what it appears. Could you not smell my fear? '' nice sad rational poem.......touching..........

'Cleaved the wings from my back. Divided my halo in half.' I think this bit is brilliant. Overall a really good poem.10++++

POOR BABY! DAMN I'M ANGRY! AT THE DEMON THAT STOLE YOUR JOY. IT HAPPENED TO HIM TOO WHEN HE WAS A BOY. TASHA YOU MUST BREAK THE CYCLE. FORGIVE HIM WHOLE HEARTEDLY AND MOVE ON WITH YOUR LIFE AND..........YOU WILL HAVE PEACE AGAIN. =D

Never should've trusted you, aren't I smart? ......to me aren't I seems incorrect.... kinda sad and dark poem........full of feelings of revenge......nicely written though......