J.A.M Challenge...... (Collection Of Poems I Feel Are Raw...You Tell Me) Comments

Kaila, in What's Left of her Soul, in the second line: And see’s the ties....... sees...........see? - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - i stumbled on this series of poems while looking for entries in Brian Johnston's Challenge 'contest' on his site on PH. i am very glad i found these; i'm only up to the line quoted above. there are some other minor english problems as i see them, but they are not worth mentioning now. i have been very impressed so far with these poems. perhaps some punctuation would help me in a few places to know where the sentence breaks are meant to be. i 'met' you a long time ago but we both seem to have felt like not checking back in with each others ph sites. raw? i guess, if they are true feelings you have. if they are made-up feelings, then the poems are also impressive, maybe more so, but for another reason....creativity and insight into how others may feel. [i did read the poet's note, and i do believe these are real about your life. i'm sorry for you if they are, but it is good you can write about the experiences.] =============now back to reading! in What's Left.........again..........she struggle’s she fights......struggle's....like see's....see? and She feels as if she’s a drift ..............i think it is adrift ====================== in Hate .....I had never meet a decent man yet..... 'met' - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - as with MANY lines in these poems, which i really feel are exceptionally well-written and expressive of deep emotions and honesty, i enjoyed reading these 3 lines, AND the last of the three made me laugh aloud! :) I am learning there are decent human beings in this world If you attack me verbally I will reply with dignity If you attack my family I will kick your ass BRAVO! BRAVISSIMA! ! thanks, Kaila, for sharing feelings, thoughts, and words. :) bri [and now that i have finished reading all of the poems, i applaud you for your positive attitude and your at-least-partial triumph over 'hatred'-of-most-men.]