It Ended With A Sandwich (Revised) Comments

oh God..that was so sad story and as Obinna said a shocking ending which shows your beautiful way of telling a story..that was a trully so excellent one...will not forget it..thanks

It is the abruptness of the change from the quiet descriptive to the shocking conclusion that 'makes' this poem. Cleverly put together, you share your horror at the story you tell with great skill. This could only happen in real life. It's just too horrendous to be invented. Love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥

Delightful piece with a shocking ending.

The beautiful picture you paint in the beginning with such lovely colors caught my interest and kept me interested. The ending is truly a shock. Well presented.

Excellent work Sandra, I really like the contrast you created in this poem, well done. Love, Andrew

touching poem presentation...good poetic response to an unfortunate read out incident...10

There's a huge amount of depth to this piece my lovely...many layers to look under....an excellent piece...written with conviction....10++++

to be so hungry as to choke on the very thing that would have eased the pain (albeit temporarily) ....what can be more tragic than that..... thank you for sharing this harrowing heart-wrenching poem Sandra! !

I'd call it a masterpiece, subtle and sensitive, and yet the denoument hits you with all the force of lightning. No question about it being a tenner.

hunger eats away all other human feelings....very well written poem sandra

any comment on incidents such as these will only make us less human...it's a real life, sandra, tell me what judgement can one pass without sounding superscilious?

My heart bleeds reading this.As I always see and experienced children who are suffering from poverty.We did our part every week end, helping out an outreach program (NGO) of my Grandma, a nun. This is really very true, and I admire your being sensitive to the needs of the children. This is a powerful message.To be heard loud and clear. Hugs, Meggie

This is compelling reading Sandra. To think a person can be so hungry to steal a child's lunch box. So many of our early emigrants from England had stolen bread for a meal and were shipped to Australia as convicts. Thanks for sharing it Sandra. I hung on to every word you wrote.... 10 love Karin

interesting piece.. sad though.. good writing.

Amazing incident which encourages one to hold back moral judgements in the face of survival.

We are always so quick to judge instead of trying to offer understanding..great writing.

Oh how utterly sad that another victim has met such an awful and starving end - - this narrative is strong and excruciating to read Sandra - and an apt reminder that the world is far from concerned with the needs of humanity.....

Irony of fate in life is well revealed by this poem! Nice to read!

sad but well written 10