I awake,
Dreams burdened with your eyes.
A recollection of temperance
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This is simply amazing. Stunning piece you have here. Awe-inspiring. Five thumbs up and two stars.
I sometimes wish I was a glass. It’s easier to break without a soul these lines are a masterpiece...
This is an amazing poem 'From a soul as empty as the spirits in a glass' then followed by 'I sometimes wish I was a glass...' Nice work. But shouldnt it be I wish I WERE a glass? Your images are honed in, not overdone and you have caught the feeling in just a few words, as every poet should do. Raynette
Strange how an empty glass of alochol can make things so much heavier. It was frustrated and deep blue. Keep writing, Delilah
This is so deep, it reminds us all of how fragile we are, I wish sometimes that our hearts were wrapped in bubble wrap.. I hope yours will be looked after, and treated with the respect it's deserves. best wish you you bro...another fine write by Mr Desantis..keep it going Jon
I sometimes wish I was a glass. It’s easier to break without a soul...Wow, this lines are crystal clear and beautiful! ! No comment.
I sometimes wish I was a glass. It’s easier to break without a soul. WOW It's Really Really Deep..and the words are sooo Wonderful Thx alot for sharing
Mister DeSantis? 'Isolation at Sunrise' is to 'classic' as crystal is to glass. What a wonderful piece of art this is. I enjoyed reading this. The style, subject matter and your 'touch' has produced a 'memory'. You have captured the essence of a craftsman's skill....and 'delivered' an awesome 'work'! Beautiful.
You always manage to convey depth with such a light touch, David. Wonderfully weighted phrasing. Really good poem. F
This is a painfully beautiful piece. I love the last stanza, it resonates with me. Just as haunting as the sound that glass would make were I to run my fingers around the rim.
Excuse me if I got this wrong, but is this in reference to a deceased child of your (one never born?) This is a painful poem, and you coveyed emotion quite well in it's unique and supple lines. I greatly enjoyed the glass metaphor.
A very poignant poem David, it says a lot and is simple but stunning as Yuri says, Well penned, Lynda xx
Aahh! stunning poem! .... in its simplicity it kicks you in the stomach, resonates in the heart....10/10
Yes fine writing worthy of the scores its been given. A challenge to those of us who know that poetry is about capturing the essence but find ourselves with to much to say and needing too many words to do it. I will try your style.
Praise for your sad, but beautiful poem. The last stanza is superb. Warm regards, Sandra
An emotionally charged poem in which every single word counts - the imagery is particularly striking - a powerful and moving piece David. j.
Oh my word, so deep and filled with regret and loss.... so sorry. I am in agreement with Deana though, no isolation here at all, only community. Keep on penning them David. HG: -) xx
You pen your despair with economy, and great emotional weight, David. Your final stanza is quite brilliant. love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥
Masterly done. I really like the following: Dreams burdened with your eyes, a soul as empty as the spirits in a glass, and unfair remnants of celestial lies. You used common images but not in a trite way.