Sunday, January 13, 2008

Is This Okay? Comments

Rating: 4.6

Dark like black like hell, not coming back, stares like knives, like poison darts in my heart, squeezed so tight like lovers first night
with pain pain pain pleasure is absent. (Probably at the doctors.)
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Effie Yalena Steyn
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Aurora Bell 14 September 2009

I thought you got rid of it for a minute there! Couldn't find it. Simply wonderful though really.

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Michelle Evans 21 February 2008

Amazing Effie, a 10. This Anna seems an amazing person...I wish I knew her. x

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Aurora Bell 19 February 2008

*subliminal messaging* change the name or I'll KILL YOU! *end*

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Michelle Evans 18 February 2008

Beautiful poem but I think the title and ending ruin it a bit.

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Aurora Bell 09 February 2008

pleeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeaaaaaaaaase change the title!

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Aurora Bell 13 January 2008

AMAZING imagery Effie, title could be better

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Cassie Williams 13 January 2008

'like poison darts in my heart', I like it, nice imagery

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Effie Yalena Steyn

Effie Yalena Steyn

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