Is She A Reality Or Just A Dream Comments

sun became moon and stars were around me, flew is a beautiful line that shines out from the poem in a kind of meteor flash. I would put a comma after me and before flew. I like this poem for its sincere feeling and its branching out into long lines of description. I would say in general, perhaps it would help you to read more poetry in English because your words and phrases are inverted somehow in English sometimes and though I enjoy reading it that way myself some people may have difficulty in understanding. I feel bad to say that as I can still feel through the words even as they are the dream like rush of feeling throughout all the phrases so I believe that in your original language this would be even more beautiful. It is not a fault in the poem itself, it is just a knowledge of how words flow together in English (and I'm really terrible at analyzing these things according to the rules of English I am so sorry so I can't help you myself this way) - I would say, just read more English poetry and you will gradually come to understand it through intuition by yourself and do not worry. The feeling is still communicated. I can see you are a very emotional poet. I think you would enjoy reading the poets Keats and Shelley because you have a similar poetic temperament, at least I think that. And something in your romantic poetry reminds me of Tagore. I really hope this helps. Write every thing you feel. I love the longer lines they convey something more graceful and feeling spills out of them like dewdrops shaken out of flowers. God Bless. Mary Angela Douglas

A dream come-true! Full of romantic air.Loved reading it.

A romantic description of an ideal girl.