My heart steps back as my tears flow
In my heart where all the love grow
Deeply wounded as your presence departs from my side
Smiling as the pain hits me from the inside to the point where my mind is no longer on a daily grind
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I give 3 stars, but would give more if you used punctuation [you don't even use a question mark after 'is happiness meant for all'] and were more careful to find and correct typos. bri : )
I'll not now take the time to reconstruct comments which I 'lost', but here is a new one: 'Loving you as brought me' See? 'has', not 'as'. Do more/better proofreading. ;)
I may have just lost the comments I'd been typing. ; ( Was it MY 'fault'? A favorite rhyming line for me so far is 'Waking up in the morning feeling loved that's how I pictured it to be' I have some suggestions. Welcome to PH. ;)
What, REALLY, does 'happiness' mean? And what REALLY does 'meant for' mean? These are challenging questions, perhaps with no universal answers. Welcome to PH. : )
I think all (?) writers can/will 'make typos/typographical errors', but I think, with enough time and care, most typos can be caught AND CORRECTED before or after publishing. : ) bri