Saturday, October 14, 2017

Is Evil Thy Name? Comments

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He gazes at her… transfixed by her untaintedness.
The lustrous glow from her sable eyes drawing him into the promised profoundness of her innocent spirit.
Fantasising how eventually she will subjugate to him andwillingly acquiesceto his suddenoverwhelming desire to possess her.
All reason reduced to manly gratification, he blindly stumbles on.
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Bri Edwards 29 December 2017

i shall put this now into my/our January 2018 showcase, by and for PH poets. if you are unfamiliar with the showcases, just ask me about them. your name shall be mentioned twice. i may also make note of some typos which PH may have made in your poem. (to be continued) .... bri

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Bri Edwards 07 December 2017

I especially enjoyed: Her eyes deep as pitch and fiery as brimstone, looked into his closed soul and she smiled her smile- irascible and mocking, but to a weak subject -radiant and alluringly shy. Where can i hook up with her? ? ? Bri :)

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Bri Edwards 07 December 2017

I am using tablet so shaĺl be brief. Some words i don't know, but will not look up. Instil or instill? Some inconsistency in verb tenses i think, near ending. BUT a 'LOVELY' story. To MyPoemList.

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