Invisible On The Concrete Comments

I like how everything in this is described on the smaller side. It creates a feeling of insignificance and indifference from the reader to the writer; pushing the latter's point yet further. Great-M

Thank you and its a little bit of both really And just so you kno the speaker in this poem is me and it was written while I was sat on the concrete feeling invisible.....

This poem is beautiful... It's short, but it has immense meaning packed into its lines... I wonder if the speaker wishes to be left alone, or if he secretly longs to have someone be there for him (but he wont let them because the people are terrible or he can't trust) . It's full of emotion, and I like that in a poem. You have talent! ^.^