Invisible Comments

This was beautiful...describes perfectly the thoughts of the lonely girl who stands out as well as what goes on arounf her. Great work!

You've captured 'the girl on the bench' well. Her appearance. her thinking, her being. Thanks for sharing. The repetition of she doesn't join in adds a nice touch. Fav lines: Her eyes dart pensively. Turns away in her shame. scared of her own small voice

Nice presentation, and showing the real life in certain places that we rarely seen but commonly found everywhere....feeling invisible or we not watching what's the real..hard to say..but for this poem..lovely write i say_Soul

yes, lots of boys and girls, lots of humans. it's totally invisible. perfect work good job.

Yeah i can b hard to fit in with snobbish stinkin rich if u r not dat affluent. Very fine sympathetic poem portrayin her plight well. Though she cud hav lookd 4 a group to fit in.

Very poignant - I know a little about feeling invisible as I was always very shy, so I can relate to this. Great write Stevie.

Sad is right, but I guess compassion is something that we learn later in life, doesn't make it any less sad.

very touchy poem..liked by me very much...great write

How very moving. Can almost see the girl on the bench. You capture her so sympatheticaly.