Thursday, May 28, 2009

Intrusion Comments

Rating: 5.0

Glimpses of you keep chasing
the corners of my eyes.
That I'm trying to evade you;
one could easily surmise.
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Roshni D'Souza
COMMENTS
Ted M 29 June 2009

You have beautifully expressed the feelings and the turmoil at the young age. 10+++

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Sarvesh Kulkarni 07 June 2009

yes.... amazingly expressed...with a slight contempt and some surprise. precise. beautiful. thank you.

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Shashendra Amalshan 03 June 2009

wow i liked these expressions 'So, I'm putting up my walls; solid mortar and bricks. Gonna hole myself in just for giggles and kicks' these a strong..effective beautiful write indeed..thanks for this one Roshinee..enjoyed it..felt it to the core of my heart too..moved...nice one A++

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Raj Arumugam 29 May 2009

love the rhythm in this poem...

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Rory Hudson 29 May 2009

Very nice one Roshni, I like the simple rhyme scheme.

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Kesav Easwaran 29 May 2009

nicely expressed...sweet love poem Roshni...i liked...10

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