Thursday, August 4, 2005

Into Your Light Comments

Rating: 4.7

What chains shackle hope to the joys of another,
  But inure my soul to the state I there find?
What tear driven dreams bear the faith of no other?
  Such shattered thoughts wrestle my bewildered mind.
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David Zvekic 04 August 2005

It is not iambic pentameter. I did not want to even call this a sonnet. In fact... I didn't :) It basically has 4 stressed beats per line, but beats may span syllables. There is a name for this somewhere.. but I forget the name, and I can't find the reference right now.

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Raynette Eitel 04 August 2005

David, you have the rhyme pattern but not the metre for a sonnet. Your poem has depth but I'm confused by your form. Raynette

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Lawrence S. Pertillar 04 August 2005

This is some good stuff! I'm jealous...LOL! Thanks and congratulations! LSP

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