Into Dust Comments

WOAH! ! I love it! ! ! Except, I mean, it's a little....democratical for me.... Or not, i'm 13, i'm to niave to have that opinion lol. But, it was so....like, pictury...or whatever...i don't know... what's the word? Anyway, the ending was so like unexpected! It probably shouldn't have been with the 'Which is quickly becoming rare' line, but I'm not very intelligent. lol The first stanza bothers me a tad. Just cuz the transition from that 1st and 2nd line could have been a little smoother. But, it's one of those things you really don't care about it just something that after the fifth read I noticed. :) Good work man...woman...you..? I probably shouldn't have done this after reading that message from you. It got me in the 'drag things on forever mood' lol