Thursday, May 9, 2013

Innocent Love Comments

Rating: 5.0

Your game of darling doll, mine of the mimic train
Unpopular your doll, always was in my brain
My train would I aim always at your silver doll
Your tears my anger, thus we spent our day all
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Jahan Zeb
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Captain Cur 09 June 2013

Great write of childhood recollections and love.

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Heather Wilkins 02 June 2013

young love is a tender experience. lovely and charming. It only happens once in a lifetime. nice write

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Hazel Durham 17 May 2013

Innocent love that goes so deep of childhood memories brought back to life so vividly! I really enjoyed this great write!

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Nader Baheri 16 May 2013

fabulous my friend.the ending is marvelous.although i feel a little sadness in it. ~nb

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Unwritten Soul 14 May 2013

Original and amazing thats all i can say...loved it_Soul

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Farah Ilyas 09 May 2013

First of all congratulation dear poet, u have completed your 100 poems, made a century as well...as for as poem is concern, you always do a great job....what should i say in aspiration, am getting confused, ....i think you should be lecturer in romanticism...hats off

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Jahan Zeb

Jahan Zeb

Malakand Pakistan
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