In The Womb Comments

This one's full of emotions. Great theme!

good theme for a poem gr8 thougts....really a work from a genius..

i like the way you have expressed the feelings from the perspective of a yet-to-be-born child... its a lovely poem, Lal... welcome to PH... best wishes, Asma...

This is a splendid theme for a poem and you have written it with great compassion. I do however think that the poem is too long - sometimes it is necessary to cull words in order to paint an uncluttered picture. See if you can express your idea in half the words. But most importantly - keep writing and reading others poetry. love, Allie xxxxxxxxx