Tuesday, January 10, 2006

In The Puddles Comments

Rating: 4.8

Rain bashing, rain crashing,
In the puddles, children splashing,
Mother's tongue has started lashing,
Everyone is wet!
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Ernestine Northover
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Ben Gieske 29 May 2007

I really like this one especially the snappy 4th line of every stanza and they're all rhyming.

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Ben Gieske 06 March 2007

Very nice ending and a good variety of descriptions for the sun and lots of action.

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Duncan Wyllie 27 March 2006

Oh Ernestine, I have tasted nector before but I can't remember it being as sweet as this.It's an amazing piece of heart warming poetry.The flow was fantastic and you have the poets gift.Love Duncan

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Emma Johnson 11 March 2006

Quite a combination of -ings. It takes a great writer to have sound and subject matter so beautifully wedded. Susie.

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Max Reif 14 January 2006

Ernestine, I think your rhymes are pretty tight here, the repetition and variation, as well as gradual thematic progression, make it an enjoyable and 'worldly-wise' poem for me!

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Solomon Brook 10 January 2006

Very lovely and well written. This 10 is for you.

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