In The Park Comments

losing, losing something the best of life the best of heart from here near of the heart, near of loving imagination near of the lips words from there near of the seat of park, beside the walking together gossiping under the shadow of tree from everywhere near of eating, bathing, sleeping, spending time of the day to night, week to month, year to years, oh losing the love......///

oops! in stanza 3, check spelling of " marraige" [sic]. bri ;) p.s. noticed during my second reading.

WoW! VERY nice. some couples are " meant" to be together. some even STAY together! ! but, alas, not all couples last. i've been tossed aside a few times and tossed a few aside, but things are looking good (enough) for me now. wish me luck. some favorite lines: the whole 2nd stanza. Cool. To MyPoemList aka " My Favorite Poems" . a showcase too if i remember in the future. bri :)

There are far too many poetic contrasts of expression in this extraordinarily spontaneous poem to enumerate; to quote each line which has made an impression on me, as a reader! This is raw poetry, this is Heart, this is the Beauty of Art!

Excellently written piece of poetry when you write, She cries with such longing for her lost love, thank you for sharing the poem with us,10

You employ some very atmospheric images ti set the tone in your first two stanzas- - -In her local park, winter looks quite stark With nude trees, their knarled branches Reaching out like the sign of nature's mark, Swans glide like graceful ballerinas The playground echoes with the lost laughter Of when she was just a child,

In her local park with the muse of love. Nice work.

winter looks quite stark. The playground echoes with the lost laughter. The beautiful sound brings a smile to her face. What an amazing description shared really that fills mind with emotion and learning. Wise breeze speaks about nice imagery here.10

Beautiful description on the change of Nature with the arrival of winter.... the bare trees, the cold river and the empty playground echoing the lost laughter. This atmosphere matches with the internal landscape of a girl walking with memories of a love lying frozen in the mind. She hopes that one day the sun will shine and the frost within her will get thawed! The poem ends on an optimistic note that soon she will get reunited with her lost husband! A 10

A nice and stylish description, though sad but impressive. W beautiful poem.

Great imagery, nice poem with a story of love and perseverance to win back the lost charm, Wonderfully written....10+++ She will find him on his beloved land, The fields of freedom,