Saturday, November 20, 2010

In The Darkness Comments

Rating: 3.5

In the darkness
In the darkness I do now but live.
In the darkest hour I shiver.
And I do all but quiver.
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DEEP DARK SOUL POET
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Frank James Ryan Jr...fjr 24 September 2016

good theme...not so good structural movement...Needs improvement...Needs to flow better...The current strycture changes in tone & fluxion from a stanzaic perspective...Still enjoyed the trip...Keep that pen pumping ~FjR~

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