Immortality Comments

'As I watch each moment pass.........by i think' I'm pleased the narrator pause to give thought to her first line. There's no permanence in life but the gift [ a writer/ poet] with which you're endowed is immortal. The first line of your poem grabbed my heart and didn't let go! All i'll say is Kudos my dear...grandma remembers at 5 years old, you stood over my shoulder watching me write and said grandma, I can write, and you did just that! Love, grandma