Wednesday, July 15, 2009

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I live in a world of illusions
A world of peoples delusions
Where the bells ring upside down
And the people dress like clowns
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Dianna Nally
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ppp sss 15 July 2009

Nice co-write you two! Any thought on adding the word 'up'? And the people dress up like clowns Just seems more natural to the flow, but otherwise a well blended piece.

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Dianna Nally

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Bakersfield CA
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