Il Mio Eterno [𝙼𝚈 𝙴𝚃𝙴𝚁𝙽𝙰𝙻💖👑🦋] Comments

If you take my suggestions, you'll deserve the four stars I'm giving you. : ) bri

'I look [ I'd use 'looked' ] up to the sky and all I could picture out [ why do you use 'out' here? ] was her stare, which sends shutters [ 'shutters' are on some windows; you mean 'shudders', I hope. ] through me, '

(cont.) ..'For a few years now my life has been sadness, depression and loneliness.'

Welcome, 'New Poet', to PH. Your first line I would edit to read as follows: 'What I have been feeling all my life has been sadness, depression and loneliness.' OR like this: (cont.) ..