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It is a blue poem heart touchingly delineated. This is emotionally presented. The penmanship is nice. The beginning stanza brings sadness. We may cite here.... One last time I saw her there, My buddy, my mate, a friend of my soul Laying in the frozen bed of ice. I could hear the howls, loud in my head, Though eyes refused to cry, And the stiffened face veiled it well. Thanks for sharing.

Lost in our identity! ! ! Lifeand death. Thanks for sharing.

Beautifully crafted. A touching poem of loss. Feeling sad for your loss. 'Life at times is like a snow flake, Pretty and light, but can't hold it tight For it will melt in our own warmth. Why do we cry, frail in pain As, we, create our own storms and rain. '...is so nice. Thanks for sharing.

a very sad poem though but such ones can't be ignored strong hearts we must all have but go only when its time to go Kindly read my poems two moms smiles and mothers day today will you to release ur pain twuld

Part 2 The choices of words, the sequence of expressions, the flow of ideas and emotions make the readers’ hearts swell, we lose a heartbeat or two. Our breathing stops for second. The times are so harsh, we dwell in apathy.. this poem hits the nail right on the head. Great poem. Onto MyPoemList with full scores.

Hi Ashika, Very profound emotions expressed in captivating words..the remorse, pain are expressed with piercing effectiveness. We walk the same streets But, We fail to notice the graying scene All that was ones dear to us” (Contd...)

A wonderful poem crafted ma'am......... 10+++++++++++++++++ Naila

In each passing breath meeting a friend is definitely very nice. But separation of friend gives pain. Identity is lost with amazing effect and this gives sorrows. Many cry in pain. This is an amazing emotional poem very well penned...10