Monday, September 22, 2008

If I Tell You I Love You, Can I Have A Kiss? Comments

Rating: 3.0

Jealousy's a sin along with liquor and gin.
I'll have alot to repent for when I get to the pearly gates.
Looking at the couples I get feelings in my gut, loneliness, wishing I was the one goin' on dates.
But I'm not I probably won't ever be, cause guys don't seem so interested in me
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Hailey Marie
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Silence Dogood 23 September 2008

Hailey the last two lines really? ? You seriously write odd poems plus guys like you. : P

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Greenwolfe 1962 22 September 2008

There is a good rhyme or two in here. There are some good lines too. But quit honestly, there is not a lot more to really care about. The writer tells you what they want but not in an interesting way. I cannot recommend this. GW62

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Hailey Marie

Hailey Marie

Brampton, Ontario - Canada
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