If I Kiss You Comments

This is a beautiful poem.If only a someone would tell me this....

Errr... to GW62: A poem is beautiful by itself... ;) this one is beautiful! .. And it's not the structure that makes a poem beautiful to start with... it's the soul... have a nice day Jane!

Your first two verses were excellant. After that, it went very bad. I'm sorry to be so clear in my critique but the poem left me no choice. It is far better to have no rhyme at all than to mix rhyme and no rhyme. It seems to me, that your goal was to rhyme this poem but you just couldn't do it. That's bad. The reader, was expecting rhyme all the way. You disappointed the reader. A reader can accept anything but disappointment. Still, your first two verses were very very good. GW62

awww... nice poem Jane! i like it! if you kiss me, then i'm kissing eternity! naks! anyway, thanks for sharing this one! keep inspiring people! -GanNi