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Hello Galina. This was such a sad, yet romantic poem. I enjoyed, Loyd

An insightful train of thoughts, well articulated and nicely encapsulated into a lovely poem. Love is a spiritual experience that continues to linger even after the source of stimulation is gone. It is whimsical and temperamental, coming without notice and leaving without warning. If love makes its exit, life must go on after awhile because worrying about its exit will not bring it back. A lovely piece of poetry that captures distress in the bliss of love. Thanks for sharing. Please read my poem THE PHOENIX STRANGLER.

This is a complex poem so I have been re-reading it two weeks plus after my first reading. Parts of it are crystal clear to my understanding; other parts are ambiguous as the speaker tries to make sense of her situation. She seems to be waiting for a clearer, decisive commitment from the man who remains unfocused to me. At the very beginning the speaker makes a direct statement: IF I'M GOOD ENOUGH, THEN YOU WILL BE WITH ME. It's a simple equation of requited love, but how difficult that is to achieve in the real world the poem itself witnesses. If only the DESIRE that brings us into love had the power of FATE to make love flower effortlessly. That would be paradise on earth!

Hi Galina Your poem is a struggle against repeated disappointments. And as happens so often in emotional entanglements, you are uncerftain of the true feeling and real intentions of the person you are almost ready to commit to. But what a risk if the commitment is only on your part! And yet how long can your emotions be in suspended conditions. By their very nature, emotions are volatile, they want to move decisively, they are eager for the next level of a relationship, and then the next level, and so on. I certainly have no wise solution in mind, only sympathy. I'm writing as if this is your experience because the poem is so vivid and immediate.