The humble ice cube
reminded me of us
of where we were and how
we lived and then it spoke
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I love how emotional this poem brings but the first stanza hit my head so strong! what a great metaphor, loved it very much!
An ice passing reminds me too much of depression and being in that state is most definitely a deadlock, a place I don; t like to be, You took me in though and I could feel the tension build as I sat in an almost nothing state. I love when a poet does that, taking me to the place where they are in word...Excellent poem.....
Thank you so much. Your remarks...well, they give writing a purpose. Thank you again.
' do you too live as ice passing? ' I sure hope I don't but your poem should make everyone think. Is there more in life that I want? If there is, don't be an ice cube.
Thanks so much, Darlene. I really hope no one would settle for being the ice cube.
ok, ya made me look up impasse [yes, i'd heard of the word; i may even have guessed to definition! ]. - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - in the poem: my exit through impasse thanks to heat and light im·passe ˈimˌpas, imˈpas/ noun noun: impasse; plural noun: impasses a situation in which no progress is possible, especially because of disagreement; a deadlock. the current political impasse synonyms: deadlock, dead end, stalemate, standoff; standstill, halt, stoppage, stop; informalCatch-22 an impasse in the peace talks poses new challenges - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - your lack of punctuation caused me (i believe) to misread the following lines at first: was all gone, no more what i did to bore my exit through impasse ........... now i assume a new sentence starts with what and doesn't end until the end of the poem. i wonder if you really were thinking of a known-to-you impasse in a relationship between people when you wrote this. AND did the ice cube REALLY speak to you! ? a clever write; i'm tempted to say intelligent, but i don't know if i should go THAT FAR! to MyPoemList and (at your offer, after my solicitation) into the August 'showcase for PH poets' on my site. thanks. i enjoyed this. bri :) ======================= p.s. beware of too much constricting (see The Pundit, below)
Hi Bri, Thanks so much...and yes, enjambment...can be such a headache, eh?
Did you feel something constrict down there? That was a green thumb from me! ! !
We all are like melting ice cubes, start our journey as water, then changed in a crystal capable of refracting light in a rainbow, then we start melting and changed in water. Great poem! .
ahhh yes, the life cycle! Thank you so much for the insight, Akhtar