I Would Rather Fade Away Comments
If my world were about to end
I would probably let my existence fade away,
Without saying a last word
Or writing a letter to mark my presence.
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This is beautiful, Ivy and I agree with Sean that the last few lines are superb. I would change the word 'was' to 'were' (to go with 'if') but other than that, you have written a lovely poem. Raynette
Ivy, this is a great poem even though you write about the world ending. I love the last few lines: 'and that clouds are see-through when you stare at them from above.' What a beautiful thought.
I couldn't agree more, and applaude your ideas. Very well written, Ivy. I'll be looking forward to more of your thoughts.
Nice, I really like the last two lines. I think you meant to say 'you stare *AT* them from above', though. Also the poem might read stronger if you removed 'probably' from the second line.
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7/19/2025 9:31:15 AM # 1.0.0
It reminded me (only abstractly of Maria Polydouri) . I loved it! Come back, wherever you may be.