Tuesday, February 8, 2005

I Wonder The Dream Comments

Rating: 2.7

I wonder,
Can you feel a dream die?
Do the stars shine less brightly
For it's passing?
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Sandra Osborne
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Sandra Osborne 17 February 2005

Been thinking about that Rich. Not sure, but I'm leaning there. Thanks so much for reading my work, your the best.

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Rich Hanson 08 February 2005

Well thought out and constructed. I especially enjoyed the first two stanzas. I wonder though, if the poem might gaim a little more impact if you tighten up the last two verses into one...just a thought

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