I Weep For You... Comments

the emotions are passionately expressed and ur tears brighten the poem and we c its magnificence quite clearly..amazing write!

Heart-felt composition, thoughtful too. what a tremendous and painful life of human! finely penned....10++++

a beautiful love poem but one that describes the deep pain. +10 (I have seen your greatness through the eyes of Syed Kamran) love anju

This is a powerful poem. It is very well written, very descriptive, and full of emotion. Excellent!

this poem took me on on the most emotional roller coaster ever., my god, your descriptions are captivating. I am sorry you hurt, then again, I am happy you loved.. see i don't even know what to say still. i don't even know how i feel..aggghhh, a roller coaster for sure. i absolutely love it.

I am left breathless, this is such a loving and splendid read. Your greatness with words can not meet mere words. Patricia Gale

Congratulations on a very sincere and honest poem that seems to me to be basically a love poem but one that doesn't flinch from describing the pain and tribulations that can sometimes accompany a lifetime's love

shocking and powerful in its heart-rending honesty. Leaves me a bit breathless. This is a very powerful piece, Phillipa. I THINK (not positive, I've only read it once) that some day there might be ways you could tighten it a little. My sense is that the man (your husband) in the poem has his pain, and you, the wife, had a different pain (which is now substantially healed) . The two merge into each other for me, a LITTLE. Maybe at some point you could make them a little more distinct from one another in the reader's mind. Possibly by numbering parts of the poem (1) about him, (2) about your own history,3 (about your newfound freedom and dignity) . I'm not sure. Anyone else concur? (If other readers disagree with me, please say so, so the poet can get the feedback.)

This is a most heartbreaking poem, Philippa. 'Flashbacks struck me like a cobra' such a good line. I would like to see more of those good similes in the rest of your poem to make it stronger. Raynette