I Was Traveling Through The Sands Comments

a nice writes..i smiled reading it, , good coz ur clock s functioning coz u recorded all the time, from half past three, and so on etcetera etcetera....very nice work alex.. naizz

Your right Alex this one is good and has promise...the sotry begins a little mundane which is good, then builds up strength...then toward the end you throw in the twist that this reader wasn't expecting..forcing me to back off.....and think... really think.....what's the mesage....revenge....equity...stupid is as stupid does.....that is the greatness of any poem....to create controversy and stir the emotion toward a process we often avoid....'rational thought'

a nice story well penned..great piece....

I really like the way you set up the poem. You tell a story but I just know the end is going to be special. That is the key to story poems. Pure entertainment. That is what it is all about. Just wonderful! GW62

A fine visual littered piece of penned lines Keep expressing Jon