I Want To Write You Comments

(cont.) 5 - in last line, do you want to add (another) to? in front of whom? IF you choose to answer at all, please do it in a message [ not just a response on this page; i rarely return ] if you wish ME to see your answers. to MyPoemList. maybe a showcase? the jury is out on that. bri ;)

i kind of like this, but it DOES leave some questions unanswered [mine]. 1 - alive means: fulfilled, energized, manic, happy, or? i don't think you mean breathing with blood flowing through your body. 2 - do you want the comma in this line? : I want to write in you, 3 - here: Which is so inseparable, ....why is, not are? 4- are my Lady and you referring to the English language, poetry, literature, or 'just a woman', ...which would seen a bit weird to me? (cont.)