I Wanna Be With You Comments

hmm she will be yours and you will be hers but she?

my lady you are mine, my dear am always yours brilliant 10

This poem is amazinq I love it<3

This poem is amazinq I love it<3

I love love poems..i like this one!

Quite simplistic form and brave to use such long repetition. Again a piece leaving the reader wanting more expression.

Well a good logic of writing this poem you adopted and seems fine also... but there should be some modification and editing so make ait a bit long, so that a complete sense of this poem could come ouside as apparantly as crystal and it will add to your poetic talent. oterwise it is upto mark.