Sunday, February 26, 2012

I Wanna Be Free Comments

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Like a bird in a cage
I've been locked up too long
It's time for me to spread my wings
and fly away.
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Ronald Kerst
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Cynthia Buhain-baello 26 February 2012

Very engaging poem that increases in intensity as one reads the lines. I think the line Instead of these four walls that surround me everyday it would blend more easily if it was written Instead of these four walls that everyday surround me (to rhyme with the previous line.) That's just my opinion, ok. I like the poem -well written piece.

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