</>Things are neither delicious to eat
Nor disgusting to vomit
Everything is tasteless
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You have poignantly expressed a feeling of pain and suffering. But why is so much sadness? Relish it? Or just getting relieved of it? At your age such sad feelings occasionally overtake people. Dont worry. But as a poet u have done ur job excellently.
A very painful and desperate feeling....but yes, you have to' take a turning and go somewhere else'this is much better...Very Good poem Rania. A TEN! !
i quote: '' Take a turning, And go somewhere else ''.. here we are waiting to read your poems, that what i can witness ! !
Look at the sky which waited my complaints to offer a cuddle They told me tonight a moon is there But i can see nothing it's moonless................. look to the blue glowing of iridescence as it enlightens soul by gleams of florence even if void yet i feel delight by resplendence..........quite amazing write by imagery as when curved ingeniously over the rune of earthly resonance, eloquent write of unique genre,10+++, thanks for sharing
Hi Rania - this is a SENSATIONAL POEM - despite the title - I score it a TEN. Good structure eleven compact triplets and enigmatic use of English. The English language is a very good language for poetry - well done. It is a POEM of DESPAIR but there is a glimmer of renewel at the end. In verses ONE to TEN you seem to lose something new in each verse V 1 Taste V 2 Color V 3 Emotion V 4 Achievement V 5 Sensation & Happiness V 6 Your Mind V 7 The Moon V 8 Heart & Sensitivity V 9 Vision of Life V 10 Consciousness. I'm glad that after all that you didn't just jump under train and end it all. V 11 Gives me some hope 'I guess I'd rather stop thinking (about thed past implied?) - Take a turning (good idea to quit the track of despair and negativity expressed in verses one to ten) - And go somewhere else (also a good idea sometimes it is the environment that bugs us) . If this is autobiographical - then act on verse 11 and get out of what you describe as a very negative situation. All the PH members are very suportive. Love you in poetry - JOHN.
you convey your emotions quite beautifully Rania, i can sense your pain (or lack of it, -numbness, anesthesia)
Nice poem and rhyming. The words are used in a nice manner. Maybe some spacing and divisions are needed to make the poem separated into a sequence of thoughts, so it would be easy for the reader to digest. Great work.
Only time will tell, this is a well penned poem, heart touching, keep it up, it is just the beginning,10+++
Very sad feelings. Cheer up, poet!