i should like
to carefreely lie
on my back,
all the while
...
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A model poem for any apprentice poet, to show how to tread the line of truth to emotion.
Such a beautiful, thoughtful way of saying 'I love you'. That someone could make you wish for time to stand still - such powerful compassion. What more could you want? Linda
Eternity in a moment. Very fine, the way you expand the image to include the image of the sun and earth. I enjoyed and admired this. The language is beautiful, and the message is very moving.
This is a very lovely reflection of adoration seen very sweetly, nice read. take care, Trisha
Lovely write that I should like. A way with words straight to the heart. Patricia
I love the languid language and symmetry of the imagery. Even the poem form itself seems lithe and graceful.10. -chuck
Beautiful. Lucky recipient! And if carefreely wasn't a word it is now... surely poetry is the ideal medium for neology!
Hi WJ, your poem is a perfect expression of loving bliss. A wonderful start to my day. 10 from Tai
Such a sweet description of your love. The image evoked by the first paragraph though, is personally all I needed, but carefreely? Is that really a word? I don't think so. j.
A lovely thought of romance. I should like to rate it highly.
Lovely poem. all the while anticipating your smile. Beautiful lines! ~Amber~