I Must Try Haiku Comments

Haiku is a most important part of literature. Haikus are poignant and deep in thought.

haha, this is funny..trying to write a haiku....but i must say....you did succeed by the last stanza!

Even I don't know to write haiku...I want to try...your poem is a lesson...I like the last one...I guess if I am right, haiku is a smart sentence arranged colourful...thanks a lot for this funny piece

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Unothordox but cleverly executed, expert penmanship

I think you have got it too Alf, but remember that anything to do with nature, food and the elements (weather) are Haiku, anything else is Senryu. I think it's very cleverly done and top marks to you for achieving a good effort. Don't forget the check out your syllables as some can have more in them than you think. Love and hugs Ernestine XXX

Yes I agree Alf trying something new and your idea of a little story works so well. I particularly like the last stanza and this is no doubt, what haiku is all about. 10 Karin Anderson

I agree entirely with Frank, but I also think it is quite clever. Haiku however can be fun to write, try doing one without the rhyme. Bob

Hmmm...A crime, as well as prison time, perhaps...if you stood afront the altar of a Zen Monastery prayer room, and recited this to 12 over-wined monks....But aside from that, Alf, i'm going to say: Inventive & Nice Work! FjR

hi alf its more a crime of passion... ;) and...shoudnt have dragged the poor cow, udder an all, into it ya sure tongue in cheek...fun read cheers

You have done it fine Including the crime of rhyme Which adds a nice touch

Very nice Alf....very clever and very funny......great work my friend....smiles 10

this is great a touch of humor too

the rhyme added rhythm.. to this fine piece..... nicely done.

i love it, I think it's one of my favorites out of your poems! ! ! ! ! i really loved how it rhymed even in haiku

Beautiful and very clever Alf...10++++