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Harkaran Singh Bajwa and Ngajay Tshering like this. Ngajay Tshering · 7 mutual friends Its internal journey after all.unique 25 minutes ago · Unlike · 1 4 people like this. Hasmukh Mehta welcome ramgarhia, imraan, pawandeepn abdu shru a few seconds ago · Unlike · 1 Seen by 1 Sonu Raj likes this. Hasmukh Mehta welcome a few seconds ago · Unlike · 1

Pinky Raj Jinodiya likes this. Pinky Raj Jinodiya kitna sundar garden he a few seconds ago · Unlike · 1 Like · · Unfollow Post · Share · 22 minutes ago 2 people like this. Anil Shukla lovely poem dear 7 minutes ago via mobile · Unlike · 1 Hasmukh Mehta welcome anil and vinay a few seconds ago · Edited · Unlike · 1 Sukmawati Komala likes this. Sukmawati Komala very beautiful poem dear poet Hasmuk 10 minutes ago · Unlike · 1

dam Schell14 minutes ago :) love it Dhee Khaye13 minutes ago I love the last 2 stanzas Keep doing well God Bless `dheekhaye Comment +1 :) Susan Payton Yates likes this. Susan Payton Yates Thank you, Hasmuka. That was beautiful. You are one among them...you don't have to worry. a few seconds ago · Unlike · 1

Seen by 2 Ryan Abram I don't want to seem like a negative critic, but I think you should look at some of the rhyming schemes. For instance; Though they both end in 'ond', respond and second are pronounced very differently. Respond has that o sound in 'ond', but second has an 'und' sound instead. I've read a lot of your work, and you seem to stick to this very basic rhyming style, and I think maybe you should try something more complex, or without as much control. I think if you payed more attention to the meaning of the poem, rather than whether the rhymes 'fit', you could create something with more flow. It'll sound more natural. Keep writing though! 26 minutes ago · Unlike · 1 Hasmukh Mehta i try to be natural without much efforts in it. it comes naturally when i start writing. the thoughts flow without creating much difference, i stick my natural pattern. one should rather need not change with literature. a few seconds ago · Like Hasmukh Mehta welcome kenny n ryan a few seconds ago · Unlike · 1

I miss in garden I asked her to come near And silently hear