I Mean More Than I Say Comments

I really like this poem as a poem. I also realize it expresses some very immediate and painful experiences for you, nothing can match the disappointment of sensing the hope and wonder another person inspires in you but does not reciprocate. (Who invented unrequited love? Why, why, why? echoes down the ages of humanity.) But as a poem you are in full command of your message, and express it without sentimentality or preaching or shrill pleading. That's what makes the poem so moving, it gets inside the reader's mind and grows larger in meaning as they connect it to their memories. You wrote this back in February and I think the title captures a quality of your subsequent writing I have come to recognize - You don't try to say everything you think or feel (which would be a fool's errand, in any case): you trust your images to convey unstated meanings, and they do far better than more words would. Too many words clutter a poem, and weaken the impact of the really eloquent images. I am sti; ; learning this lesson myself - one of my best friends here at PoemHunter, Fabrizio Frosini, who lives in fabled Florence, keeps reminding me of my tendency to overwrite, or make things too obvious. In your POET'S NOTES you aptly identify what we should aim for - not WORDS, WORDS, WORDS (as Hamlet put it) , but a few DEEP words. And the people who are sensitive and on your wave-length, the people who ultimately will matter most to you, will see the depth in (your) words. Amen to that, right? !

Beautiful piece of poetry. Great expressions