Thursday, December 11, 2008

I Me And Myself Comments

Rating: 4.8

i never imagined that it'll be so tough
as am all alone here right now
something went wrong i dont know how
i thought we had the truest love
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ajith patnaik
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Mel Vincent Basconcillo 28 April 2009

this is quite a poem u got here..truly genuine and unique! truly you indeed! u amazing! =)

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Dr. Kolitha Lelwala 30 December 2008

I love this poem, again in this, there is a philosophy of 'impermanaece'. They way you have painted it.... 'now i see that everything is none'. And he is in his real 'awarenes' after being betrayed, so expalined...'i surely wont become a fool'. You've got a good future in poetry.

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james Xane 25 December 2008

Nice work. I can see you've used the verses quite well. The title could've been a bit more relevant to the theme - I mean like something that reflects the pain in the poem. A nice peice it is anyway. Keep writing.

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Ency Bearis 25 December 2008

a wonderful write/rhymes..a sililoquy...well done..

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XXxxKimberleyxxXX .. 23 December 2008

nice poem emotiones are up and downs butr its good 10++++++++++++ keep up the good work xx kimberley xx

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Chitra - 17 December 2008

loaded with sensitivity and finely penned

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C.H. Seow 13 December 2008

the emotions are definitely there and u just have to work a little bit on ur rhymes...is better to write a poem with a blank verse or one with rhyming...to me, thats where u should start frm..but overall, it's certainly a rich and sentimental poem! a 9 frm me =D

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Mimi Fakhira 12 December 2008

Very long and very touching! I like it! I really enjoyed it. Keep up the fresh ideas.

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brittany 11 December 2008

that is a very pretty piece. penned very nicely!

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