i never imagined that it'll be so tough
as am all alone here right now
something went wrong i dont know how
i thought we had the truest love
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I love this poem, again in this, there is a philosophy of 'impermanaece'. They way you have painted it.... 'now i see that everything is none'. And he is in his real 'awarenes' after being betrayed, so expalined...'i surely wont become a fool'. You've got a good future in poetry.
Nice work. I can see you've used the verses quite well. The title could've been a bit more relevant to the theme - I mean like something that reflects the pain in the poem. A nice peice it is anyway. Keep writing.
nice poem emotiones are up and downs butr its good 10++++++++++++ keep up the good work xx kimberley xx
the emotions are definitely there and u just have to work a little bit on ur rhymes...is better to write a poem with a blank verse or one with rhyming...to me, thats where u should start frm..but overall, it's certainly a rich and sentimental poem! a 9 frm me =D
Very long and very touching! I like it! I really enjoyed it. Keep up the fresh ideas.
this is quite a poem u got here..truly genuine and unique! truly you indeed! u amazing! =)