I'M Moving On! Comments

and i think i can get around PH and make I'M into I'm in the title, as i know you want it that way. bri :)

yes, it sounds like a nice poetic song. just a few tiny typos i think. wont in stanza 1 AND, in stanza 4, first two lines: I head a train coming on the line It’s coming fast its coming on time ......................either heard or hear, not head ..........ha ha :) - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - and its in second line. ho ho! ! and i think you assent to me correcting them before i squeeze this into December's a showcase for PH poets, Section A. thanks for letting me use it, kind sir. bri :)